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Icy blood cascades down
i drink it in, almost drown
and now it's deep inside of me
it's further in than you can see
and your blood it's in my heart
bound in leather, torn apart.

Note from the author: don't try to write poetry when you are as drunk as i was when i wrote this.

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by nimue_the_mighty

Vampire Metal?
Drunk is no way to write, but inspired is inspired. I think you could turn this into metal lyrics. Icy blood is a strong image and so is the last line.

On second thought, ignore my preaching on writing drunk. Its not for me but I'm not your grandpa. The point I was trying to make is; regardless of when this came to you it may have some value. right now it reads like a snipet. It seems incomplete. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

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