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Ears of surrounding stalks
chafe at me, wavering in the wind
but never wavering there attention,
the moments repeated over.

Uprooting and journeying through
trough and brook would demand
looks of concern, are you meant
to do that?

So I look up and fight for growth
and sunlight, so my ears do not
flicker down and weigh my roots
with scratching wheat.

Now I'm taller, I can see
the waves in front of me.
I can see the expanse of
endless growth to wade through.

I can see something else,
some red beast with whirring
blades, skimming off the heads
of the wilderness.

Now I wish I had cherished
the forest around me, learnt to
live in them as companions,
accept the hurt.

------
Ask not what you can do to poetry, but what poetry can do to you.


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The following comments are for "Never Rise Above"
by londongrey

Windchime
Hi Lucie,

Thank you so much for your comment, I'm trying to get back to me at the moment, and in so going back to the type of poetry I used to write.

This will be my last contribution to Lit for quite some time as I keep getting nasty messages, I'm not getting into it but I've had enough.

Take care

Alex xxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: January 15, 2005 )

Alex
I loved your poem and its symbolism. I too love nature, and cry for its rapidly rate of dissappearance.
Please do not stay away too long. Though i do understand your reasons, i like the fact that we are both doing some self exploration.We share that in common.
As i am not a long termer here I do not know all very well. However I am intuitive enough to detect that 'tenseness' you speak of. It is such a shame to that it occurs here where we all are joined for mutual and peaceful writings.
Your literary gifts and presence will be missed.

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: January 15, 2005 )

Alex
May I join the others in hoping that you'll change your mind, or that, should you leave, your absence will be brief? We'll miss you, man!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: January 15, 2005 )

beautiful poem alex
what compells you to leave? whatever it is has escpaed my eye. I don't believe i've commented on your writing as yet, but i've always enjoyed it. I, too, feel that your straightfoward kindness will be missed. Stay, and we'll aid in the struggle. Brad

( Posted by: brad [Member] On: January 15, 2005 )

Everyone...
Thank you,

For all of your kind words.

I didn't want to come off melodramatic, I just need a rest and to get back to myself, I'm sure you all understand. When circumstances take over and you don't get the time to breathe.

This poem was about me realising that remaining aloof and using my brain isn't always the best option, sometimes gut instinct needs to take hold, finding the balance is difficult as there are some things you should never see, no matter what people say about ignorance.

Thank you though.

Lots of love

Alex xxxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: January 15, 2005 )

Alex - Never Rise Above
I want you to know I have been reading this. Well, if you must go, friend... take care. Thank you very much for your poems, and for commenting on mine.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )





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