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I sing of Hunger in a land of bountiful harvests.
I sing of granaries bulging with grain,
while long suffering multitudes wait outside , gaunt and wracked with hunger .
I sing of convoys ,their axles creaking in protest, trundling down highways
bearing grain to the distant battlefields
while emaciated , brown bodies lie pathetically huddled beside the highways …
beyond hunger…too weak even to beg.
I sing of villages ,desolate and abandoned ,with not a living soul in sight.
I sing of fields once lush and laden with crops
reduced to dry , blasted earth.
I sing of enormous swathes of ground around the myriad streams ,criss-crossing the land,
littered with rotting corpses and skeletons
of the three million dead innocents .
I sing of ,massive flocks of vultures blotting the sky above,
swooping down to feed on gargantuan feasts of carrion spread out below.
I sing of jackals, curs and rodents without number
prowling among the corpses
feeding on scraps of rotting flesh
crunching through brittle bone .
I sing of a hellish , unbearable stench pervading the very air around ,
blanketing the entire land
in a monstrous pall of death.

I sing of little angels of mercy who ‘unhonoured and unsung’
could do little beyond giving surcease to the dying,
their faith in an infinitely loving and all-merciful God
shaken to their very roots.

I sing of the faint rumble ,that pierces this stillness ,
as massive fleets of planes soar high in the skies overhead ,
on their way to rain death and destruction on the enemy
lurking just over the mountain range,
that looms ,a faint blue blur on the distant horizon….

I sing this paen to Man’s boundless Inhumanity to Man
- that transcends all else.


------
RJKT


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The following comments are for "Distant Thunder"
by RJKT

Thanks Tinalouise
Very trenchant observations...however please could you tell me ,in a little more detail, about how one could 'pace ' as you say 'in a more digestible poetic style'.

Would greatly appreciate this from you.

Best Wishes

( Posted by: RJKT [Member] On: January 14, 2005 )

Tina Louise...
Since one was writing about a famine in the land from where 'namastes' originate , i thought i'd write in the style of the Bengali poets - very passionate and over the top if you will,with copious outpouring of words ...and not in exquisitely crafted understatement ,all the rage in the West.

Couldn't help but notice your birthdate . If it is Sept 3rd - and not Mar 9th- then our birthdays fall on the same day...except that i am a Forty Niner .

Pranams to your Namastes.

( Posted by: RJKT [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

Tina Louise and Penelope
First of all ,i can't thank you both enough for having taken the trouble to read and assess...and most importantly comment sincerely

I see your point ..it could do with tightening ...fewer words having infinitely more force than whole paragraphs.

My email address is : rjkt@excite.com

Best Wishes to you both...and pranams..

( Posted by: RJKT [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

Theology
Dear RJKT:

Thank you so very much for your absolutely wonderful endorsement of my piece: Theology!

Doug

( Posted by: dougsoderstrom [Member] On: January 28, 2005 )

Dougsoderstorm
Dear Doug

Very rarely does one come across a work like yours..it stands ,shining forth ,on its own intrinsic merits.

I'd consider it a privilege if you could give me your honest opinion on some of what i've posted here..would help me improve.

RJKT

( Posted by: RJKT [Member] On: January 28, 2005 )

RJKT
The fact is that I am just a beginning poet as I have only been writing poetry on a consistent basis during the past three years, and, as of yet, have not been very successful at all in attempting to get my pieces published. So, as you can see your very kind remark rgarding my work means a great deal to me! Thank you so much, RJKT!

And yes I surely will read your pieces as you have asked. But given that I am just a beginner and know next to nothing about poetry, I'll do my best to respond given my lack of knowledge.

Doug Soderstrom





Doug

( Posted by: dougsoderstrom [Member] On: January 30, 2005 )





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