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Wondering:

You took my heart
With acceptance and gratitude
And for a time you gave me yours
Then walked away with the two

The mountain tells me that
There is more pain in the world
The daisies and grasses echoe
My thoughts, trodden and worn

The old man with raisin-hands
Smiles as he recollects the past
That he has handed down to
Me as some sick joke

I'm wondering what the next
Step is although I still haven't
Found the resolution for the last

Will you return or will you
remain empowered,
However much it crushes me...
Like sandpaper to a splinter

That splinter in my mind,
of wondering and unknown truths
That you never bring yourself
to tell me

And that was all I asked for...


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The following comments are for "Wondering"
by Dark Shadow

i can't complain.
i enjoyed this poem. the only thing is, if you were planning on submitting this into a contest or something, you'd want to make sure the stanzas were even. stanza four would be a line short. but i like it the way it is :o) the message in the poem is universal, and i can't help but like that, because it doesn't alienate emotions. anywho, keep posting :o)

~v

( Posted by: Veruca Salt [Member] On: May 21, 2002 )





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