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I'm just going to start putting all my unorganized poetry into the rant section. This isn't angry at all. It was actually called "Finding Myself" in my notebook, but I changed it. Anywho, i like REVIEWS...so, if you read it and don't like it, just tell me. I always have room for any improvement :o)

thanks ~v

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"I See You All the Time"

I want to give this up
You don't know
You don't know me well
I can see you all the time
I want to find out how you taste
Maybe I can find myself
Maybe I could find a part of me
In you somewhere
Then we can be happy
I really have nothing to lose
So, why not ruin my dress?
Why not fall for you?
Why not take a chance?
Maybe I would be surprised
What if you treat me right?
What if you love me too?
Maybe we could be happy.
I don't know you.


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The following comments are for "I See You All the Time"
by Veruca Salt

thanks for the opins.
lol@monica/bill. that's funny :o) i didn't even catch that. *giggles* i'm never gonna look at this the same again.

i was sort of battling with myself on the idea of putting it under rants. i guess that it would have been fine underneath the poetry section.

as for punctuation, rogan, i have punctuation diffuculties. lol. i'll try to work something out if i ever decide to post it somewhere else.

thanks for the suggestions. rock on!

~v

( Posted by: Veruca Salt [Member] On: May 23, 2002 )





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