The following comments are for "Selfish" by fairgrace
fairgrace:Time "to" share..
Did you mean to say :only his 'to' share..?
Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 8, 2005
do u mean that the haiku is not clear tobe understood ? : (
I meant that the selfish person doesnt like people to share him his time...by giving help..listening, sharing,,,etc..
I hope ths explanation will make it clearer
all the best and thanks for reading
Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: January 16, 2005
fairgrace's choice of words
I understand meaning. It was question of grammar.(In last line -"no share") I suppose poetic license is allowed..."to share" with or of himself works, but your choice is interesing. I still like it!
Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 16, 2005
thanks for being interested in my work!
does it need to replace it and modify or no??
I will try to modify it as soon as possible
Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: January 17, 2005
fairgrace: "no" or "to"...
Of the two, I would choose "to", but you are the one to decide. Keep writing.
Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 17, 2005
I can read...
I can read the nice moral concepts, wonderful portrayal. Seems like you are from nice traditional culture, i like your thinking!
Posted by: Clark [Member] On: February 21, 2005
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