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A selfish person believes
That his time
Is only his no share


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The sweet is never as sweet without the sour, and I know the sour which allows me to appreciate the sweet.


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by fairgrace

fairgrace:Time "to" share..
Did you mean to say :only his 'to' share..?

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 8, 2005 )

Bobby
Hi bobby...
do u mean that the haiku is not clear tobe understood ? : (
I meant that the selfish person doesnt like people to share him his time...by giving help..listening, sharing,,,etc..
I hope ths explanation will make it clearer
all the best and thanks for reading

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: January 16, 2005 )

fairgrace's choice of words
I understand meaning. It was question of grammar.(In last line -"no share") I suppose poetic license is allowed..."to share" with or of himself works, but your choice is interesing. I still like it!

BobbyG

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 16, 2005 )

Thanks Bobby
thanks for being interested in my work!
does it need to replace it and modify or no??
I will try to modify it as soon as possible

thanks again

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

fairgrace: "no" or "to"...
Of the two, I would choose "to", but you are the one to decide. Keep writing.


BobbyG

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

I can read...
I can read the nice moral concepts, wonderful portrayal. Seems like you are from nice traditional culture, i like your thinking!

( Posted by: Clark [Member] On: February 21, 2005 )





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