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Throw out the dusty welcome mat,
Close your chamber door,
Enforce the walls that keep you safe,
And curl up on the floor.

Remember all the pain you've felt,
Take comfort in it's grip,
Clench your teeth and scream,
Feeling the blood upon your lip.

Pity for the lonliness,
Fight the shakes away,
Hold your pillow while you sleep,
and hope you'll be saved someday.

*Knock...Knock*



~Bleed~



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The following comments are for "Hero At The Door"
by Bleed

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i probably got something entirely different from what you intended to write. the *knock knock* at the end is what i liked, and i think most people wouldn't get the idea of it. i didn't at first, but then i just started to think about who the hell could be knocking on the door. that's what made me like the poem...that sort of mystery hanging around it. not to mention there's good imagery, and it rhymes nicely (i have a hard time rhyming stuff on my poems, so i admire people who rhyme well :oP). as always, keep posting!

( Posted by: Veruca Salt [Member] On: May 20, 2002 )

Sweet
Bleed,

This was incrediable! It flowed nicely and left me wanting more. Reminded my a bit of Poe...lovely.

Later,
Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: February 6, 2003 )

Rhyme
Good poem and excellent rhyme scheme - one so good that i didnt notice it until i read the comment by Veruca :lol The subject matter is great too and the whole mysterious feel works well, making me feel that this is actually written in irony when coupled with the title. This would make a powerful political poem if you ever used it as such.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: July 17, 2003 )

thank you all
It's been awhile since I've been able to write anything...writer's block I guess but looking back on this piece it seems like I didn't even write it. :) I'll try to write some more for you, if I can thank you... it means a lot to me when people like my work.


~BLEED~

( Posted by: Bleed [Member] On: July 18, 2003 )





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