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Circles circling round and round
Following a labrynth without a sound
Looking this way looking that
never looking forward or back

Circles circling round and round
Ever closer to the ground
Darkness is coming closer now
For the last time will I take a bow

Circles circling round and round
What will be looked for? what will be found?
Is there and end to this nightmare
Can I escape? would i dare?

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The following comments are for "untitled"
by hbaybb

hey people read this
Great rhyme and meter except for "back". My sympathies. The third stanza is especially good.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: May 19, 2002 )

It's good
I agree Furius, its a nice read. I however, think that the last stanza was the weakest. To me it didn't fit the first two. But I liked the imagery, repetition and word selection.

Good job hbaybb.


( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: May 19, 2002 )

but still and
It is kind of broken up I agree but I think the whole point of the poem come to a really nice conclusion there. I really liked the rhyme between dare and nightmare.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: May 20, 2002 )

Reminds me
Kinda reminds me of that song "Windmills of your mind". :-)

I liked this poem a lot. It's just go so much in it for such a short peice, and it flows beautifully.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: December 5, 2002 )

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