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aching deep within
reaching out beyond the veil -
never forgotten

Ivor G Davies

Author's Note:
inspired by Grandma's Bea's 'Winter Vignette' and the loss of 'our' nearest loved one

The moment created this second, is a moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.

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The following comments are for "Aching"
by ivordavies

An eloquent expression
of the pangs of grief, and the enduring memory of those lost to us. Nice haiku Ivor! thank you-

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: January 5, 2005 )

ivor: "Never forgotten"..
Fluent and expressive..Very moving. Thank you for sharing..

Robert William

( Posted by: bobby7L [Member] On: January 5, 2005 )

Thank you for writing this!!
It is simple and up to the moment..I was moved by this haiku..and I like ur words bout the moment

read my own moment??
would have a look pls?

All the best

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: January 5, 2005 )

Beautiful Ivor@
I'm touched by the inspiration...our souls meet on common ground.


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: January 5, 2005 )

Loss of a loved one
I feel your loss...My dad is gone and mom's mind is I' lost her, too...didn't mean to bring you down...good write...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: January 5, 2005 )

Aching within.....
Thank you for all for reading this, I think it is fairly universal for anybody who has sufered the loss of a loved one.

Haiku, does not come 'natural, to me and it normaly takes a single thought to trigger it, I have not yet found the 'feeling' that lets me use this form to interpet every thought as I find I do comfortably in rhyme.



( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: January 6, 2005 )

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