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My heart is like an empty vase,


No stems dwell, short or long,


A gilded frame without a portrait,


A scale without a lovely song.





No moon to light my midnight sky,


Nor stars to guide the way,


No green to tint this lush Spring field,


A blueless sky, a sunless day.





If she exists outside my dreams,


And if, by chance, we meet,


This void inside my heart would fill,


And then, I too, would be complete.

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**Best when read by the expiration date printed on the back of this post**


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The following comments are for "My Heart Is Like An Empty Vase"
by Chiachiarone

nice
i like it

( Posted by: FangChen [Member] On: January 6, 2005 )

Empty Marc...
I love the words and the feeling this brought out - desolate yet hopeful. Absolutely lovely with a perfect end. Namaste

( Posted by: tinalouise [Member] On: January 6, 2005 )

charming little poem.
if you find the moon to light your midnight sky, write about it.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: January 6, 2005 )

empty vases
Chia, this could have been cliche'd, or bordered on angst or sentimentality. I think you stayed just on the good side of the line. I know that because when I read something that crosses it, I get a hinky feeling, which I did not get with this. It has stars, and moon, and gilt, and "complete", but it is put together in a way which emotes rather than chokes. A good job.

Claire

( Posted by: clairesbest [Member] On: January 7, 2005 )

Thanks again!
I'm sorry for not responding much. I've been busy with my work etc. Thank you all for the kind words.

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