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The setting sun encapsulates the end of the day.
Like holding hands with the girl you love.
Flames of a setting sun,
entwined with the clouds. (your fingers)

The hairs on your arms rise with the moon.
A kiss goodnight.
Beautiful and as fragile as a butterfly.
A small piece of "heaven in her eyes".

Holding on as Angels come to call.
In a sad and crazy dream, you awake.
Her perfume seems to linger with the memories.
You smile.

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The following comments are for "Can't help falling (for Kim)"
by Mr Adams

cant help falling
This is totallt tenderly and touchy>>
light and smoothy
I love the soft expressions like angel..sun..moon


( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: January 3, 2005 )

falling for Kim
I really like this poem- it's pretty.

( Posted by: DrgnFire [Member] On: January 5, 2005 )

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