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Stirred conscience forging
It’s relentless energy
And confident spirit.
Told truths forced to be
Wrapped in lies,
Made promises I can’t keep.

Dormant dreams savagely
Shake me, I rise in a sweat and
Scream, “But I love him”.
Weeping now my quarters,
I seduce the dreams
Back to their harbors.
I sleep again to rise
In pools of anger,
Which only fear can displace.
I move forward when
I dare not show them my pain,
My overwhelming terror.

Burdened tears,
Find themselves homeless again
As I try to seek them a shelter.


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"Your pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding" Khalil Gibran, The Prophet




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The following comments are for "Stirred Conscience"
by Serendipity

loooved it!!
The last verse was incomparable, I loved it. The poem is great considering you added a little action to it, for example wake up screaming…, savagely shake me…I liked those a lot too. Sorry to have read them so late.

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: February 12, 2005 )

I love the..
vibe i get from reading this because of its somber yet brutally hitting nature with it. I think that the "seduce of dreams" is my most powerful image which i really like. and its sweetly crafted becuase its not that long which is good because it means there is no fluff.

( Posted by: ryangilr0y [Member] On: March 16, 2005 )





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