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Dear Universe...

I have railed at your inequity
At the imbalance of justice uncorrected
Become jaded because of things I cannot fix
and you ignore me.

I have cursed your uneven hand
Balked at your blindness to the truth
And I am the one who always said,
Prove nothing to me.

And then you let me hear imploring,
Whispers from the masses;
It could have only been the answer
to my demands.

Imagine that you could hear
all the Whispers, far and near

I'm hungry, but we don't have no food
Someone feed me please, 'cause I've been good

Bring my daddy home safe to me
So he can bounce me on his knee;

Make mama stop crying, let her be glad
To see her hurt makes my heart sad

When me and Johnny had a talk
He told me that he wished to walk;

The little girl with the tattered shawl,
Give her a coat like my one in the hall;

All people oppressed who have no say,
Help them find a better way;

Families broken, not destined to mend
Give whatever peace you can send;

Please let the ones who have the code
Think twice before they let the world explode.

Let Arab and Jew walk hand in hand
Across sands we call the promised land;

Show the righteous they've found just one path
That might shield them from the final wrath.

But let them know there are other ways
To find the bliss of eternity's days.

Give strength to the one who resists the vice
So they need not pay a double price;

Implant a dream in every child who lives
That exceeds the blessings another gives.

Too many whispers, longings all year around,
From every hamlet, and every town.

So, Universe, you are off the hook,
I hear the whispers, where you have to look;

Let everyman look at his own life,
Revere his place on this fragile sphere
so that there is not a question
That his footsteps remain clear.

Each man will do what he must do,
And espouse beliefs held dear,
But we cannot blame the universe
For what we did when we were here.





















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The following comments are for "Whispers"
by Clairesbest

Universe
This is great...you bring up a sensitive topic, and so many issues!! I like the ending very much....for we always tend to blame everything on everything else! Human nature....but we can't...thanks for the great share.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: December 24, 2004 )

Eternal Truths!
Love this claire...how did you get to be so old and wise...for one so young!

This reminds me of an old Irish proverb:
"If all the troubles of the world were placed in the middle of a circle...you would take back your own!"

No one is unique to tragedy, misfortune and dissapointment. God doesn't single us out on a whim because he had a bad day. How we deal with this part of life determines our future...give in and give up...or acknowledge our situation and try to move on...to try to improve it, or live life to the fullest despite our infirmities.

"I railed against God because I had no shoes...till I met a man who had no feet!" God Bless

Love ya,
Gram

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: December 25, 2004 )

I loved this piece Claire!
Extremely well written with the points ringing through with each stanza.
There are so many of humanity who cry when they need nothing, and those who suffer in silence who need so much more.
And to lay blame on all but the responsible parties is yet another of human kind's obsessions as well. Wake up world, take responsibility for your actions. Reach out and help those who need it more. I believe that it is the meek who shall inherit the earth, as they are truly the ones who would rule with kindness and fairness to all.
Perfect timing for this beautiful piece, when peace on earth and goodwill towards man should be remembered most. Yet.....should that not be remembered always?
Blessings of peace to you for your forward thinking and courage to state your opinion with such poetic grace.

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: December 25, 2004 )

Exquisite
Claire;
This is so Exquisite...You have that God given talent...God open up doors that no man shuts...

Merry Christmas and be Blessed,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: December 25, 2004 )

That One Could Here...
The worlds murmurings for only an hour...

It seems as though you have heard them if only for a moment and look at the profound effect...

Peace is not just a wish...

Joy is not just thought...

Love is not just a whim...

The Universe IS listening... and we are all part of that Universe... WE must do something when we hear or see or feel... Acknowledging it, is not enough...

Your words have reminded us... Now, we must act...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: December 25, 2004 )

whispers
this is beautiful claire!!!! you have written this "wishful thinking" piece at the perfect time. You have such a soft spot for the underdog and for the injustice in the world.

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: December 25, 2004 )

whispers of the universe
claire

The last two stanzas turns this good poem to an outstanding one. Your poems make the universe sing.

warmest and fondest regards,
bob

( Posted by: rcallaci [Moderator] On: December 25, 2004 )

forced rhyme
this says nothing new with middling rhyming. Peace on earth and all that jazz just in time for the holidays.

( Posted by: Georgie [Member] On: December 26, 2004 )





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