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I'll never understand why we find ourselves
in this same desolate battlefield
clutching familiar stones, arms coiled back
to hurl our insecurities at one another
for nothing more than the sastisfaction
of knowing that fragile bones will splinter
from the savagery of our trajectories.

Is there a satisfaction in devastation
in the quid pro quo of accusations
in the attempt to balance blame
or is it malice that returns us to our corners
tensed on the precipice of yet another war?

Do the reasons matter at all,
or is it just our pattern, made ritual
by the unyielding nature
of these stones of contention,
Do we need an intervention
or should we just let fly,
only to circle back later for another try.


------
Smile if you're stupid,
laugh if you understand.


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The following comments are for "Stone's Throw"
by Bartleby

"Measuring the weight of
words spoken"-from "Words and Stars"...There is a residue..like a "ming"..Half-lives?....Powerful. Really enjoyed your poem..on multilpe levels.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 24, 2004 )

Throwing stones
Wonderful. I can't even think of more to say, just wonderful!

( Posted by: everybodyelsesgirl [Member] On: December 24, 2004 )

Barry McGuire
A rehash with the same old story.

( Posted by: Georgie [Member] On: December 26, 2004 )

bart redux
Like the content and the imagery -- well put, eloquent even. But I think it works equally well, if not better, as simple prose. And I think that's a problem, since poetry should distinguish itself. Also, I get thrown by occaisional rhyming -- may just be me. I'm off to take a look at more of your writing. Seems promising.

( Posted by: brad [Member] On: December 28, 2004 )

brad's reply
brad~

Thanks for stopping in. I'm glad you enjoyed the content if not all aspects of the delivery. The whole non-uniform rhyme scheme is something that I do from time to time.. (like so) and it works better for some people than others. It's a bit of experiment for me, and I'll take your comment under advisement.

Once again, thanks for stopping by.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: December 28, 2004 )

well well
During our disagreement I thought, "You know, it's been a while since I read Bart's work. I should see what he's been up to so I can think of him as a writer again". And I found this.

And how appropriate, eh? You're a good writer. I'd forgotten that, nice to be reminded. I especially appreciated this stanza:

"Is there a satisfaction in devastation
in the quid pro quo of accusations
in the attempt to balance blame
or is it malice that returns us to our corners
tensed on the precipice of yet another war?"

All of the above, man.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: January 10, 2005 )





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