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She smells like snow
that crisp smell, white noise
for my nose, smothering
the burn of after dinner cigarettes
and my faded cologne
that she says smells good enough to eat.

Perhaps it's because she arrived
in spring, when icecaps slide
earthward filling all tributaries
with their stunning rush
sweetening them as only cold can.

Or is it because she comes
from a place where snow
in a common blanket, while I
learned to fear the smallest patch
of ice from an early age.

Either way, I'm here,
curled into the gentle curve
of her back, filling my chest
with mouthfuls of her northern smell
until I'm nothing more than an eskimo
huddled in a diamond dome of snow.

Smile if you're stupid,
laugh if you understand.

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The following comments are for "Eskimo"
by Bartleby

Man you have some amazing lines here! I am happy to see you writing again. I really enjoy your work. I love the last stanza the most. Excellent!


( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: December 23, 2004 )

Wow!! I'd like to get a hold of that muse. This one is excellent. The imagery is wonderful. I love that it has turned cold into something beautiful, when stereotypically it has a negative meaning when describing a relationship. Wonderful job changing the way it can be viewed.

And I guess I can just mimic everyone else's favorite line, since it was my favorite as well. "White noise for my nose." Very well done.

( Posted by: everybodyelsesgirl [Member] On: December 23, 2004 )

This was so original!! I clicked onto it expecting something totally different.

Well done, like everbodyelsesgirl said above, I'd like to get hold of that muse.


( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: December 24, 2004 )

Smell of Snow
Great poem. I was thrown by one line though. Should 'IN a common blanket' be 'IS a common blanket' ?

I'm glad you didn't give up on the word Eskimo. There are some that believe that its derogatory and I'm hopeful that this perseption will fade. I think it needs to be capitalized though.

Given that there are something like 15 Yu'pik Eskimo words for snow, and a bunch of variations. The white noise for your nose must be everchanging in subtle ways. Veery nice. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: December 24, 2004 )

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