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Trace the moments
where we stood together.
the place
where our feet crushed cruel space.

Stand watching
as the worlds collide.
drop the hands
and flea among the others.

When the stars are above and below,
Tear the lips from your face.
then as the beginning is at those lonely feet
the end is finally over.

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The following comments are for "the illusia chronicles.. tracing lost footsteps, the last of lovers war closing part II"

illusia II - DEB
When is the end going to be over but when the beginning is at those lonely feet? I also love this one. I'm sorry, I read these two (part 1 & 2) a few months ago and it is only now that I can comment on them.

There's just one word that I noticed: wasn't it supposed to be 'flee' instead of 'flea'? Still a lovely, hearbreaking poem.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: May 4, 2005 )

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