This Life
by Huni (Member) - published: December 24, 2004
Word Count: 49 Word Bytes: 350 Viewed: 553 times
Category - Poetry
© Copyright by Huni

8.66

(3 votes)

Rating	Rated by

8	Bobby7L

9	chapter1

9	JEANNIE45

You must login to vote

Gulping in air
sucking at the surface.
Waiting- always waiting
for it to come each day.
Round and round, this circular life.
Always going, always
coming back to here.
No one notices the tears.
Everyday the same- the only option
a marble slab.
I may as well stay.

------
Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.

Related Items

Dress (Haiku)

To a Writer

Tonight

Come Summer

I Saw a Shape

Sweethearts

This Life

Death in a Garden

Spring Writes

The Old Man's Silver-tipped Cane (kyrielle sonnet)

More by Huni »

Comments

The following comments are for "This Life"
by Huni

marbleous
I got nothin'. I'm just admiring your panache, again. Gives me a lonely feeling, deep down. The last line is bedrock, Huni.

( Posted by: Rogan [Member] On: December 25, 2004 )

Very Tasteful
Huni; I liked this alot...A very "Tasteful" Poem.

Merry Christmas and Be Blessed,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: December 25, 2004 )

Trapped and resigned
Rather than Life, this sounds like clinical depression. Sad in a wearying kind of way. Nicely crafted though. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: December 26, 2004 )

"This Life"
Moving piece... Ultimately, resignation...Take care of you. Happy New Year....

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 28, 2004 )

Rogan, Jennie, Philo, Boby, chpt1.
Thanks everyone for coming by. This was an excise in metaphor. I love metaphor and use it in my day job all the time. I was observing something and tried to write it in metaphor and this dark piece come out. I'm so sunny and positive - it always surprises me. Panache Rogan, high praise from you and gratefully accepted. thanks, huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: December 28, 2004 )

Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Login:
Password:

Related Sites:

Buy PSP
*Savings Accounts
*Xbox Mod Chip
*Spyware Removal Cleaners
*Mobile Phone