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we who breathe the sea
currents of loves casualties
drown in memories


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The following comments are for "we of the waves"
by dachish

to dachish
Overall a good haiku, very easily to understand and imagine.

Is it suppose to be loves' instead of loves?

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: May 12, 2002 )

re:
Yes, yes I suppose it is. I forget those often times when I'm writing. It didn't even cross my mind until you pointed it out.

( Posted by: dachish [Member] On: May 12, 2002 )

dachish
nice haiku. (could also be "love's", no?)"dance in brine, dance in seaweed.."

( Posted by: verve [Member] On: May 12, 2002 )

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well, i guess tags don't work in comments. :P (or maybe i did it wrong)

( Posted by: verve [Member] On: May 12, 2002 )

the Mer
Nice haiku, if i'm not mistaken it would be about the Mer?

I like it because the ideas are clearly indicated, but in such a way that it doesn't just hand you the cookie - it makes you think and work for it.

Ju =*_*=


( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: May 13, 2002 )

re:
I hate to sound ignorant, but that is often what I am. I'm not very clear on what "The Mer" is. A friend of mine who is a major in French informed me it was how they say "the sea", but I have to assume that is not what you meant. I could only imagine perhaps a French piece of writing. Or, actually, even an English; I sadly did not pay much attention back in high school.

( Posted by: dachish [Member] On: May 13, 2002 )

dachish
It's a great poem because it gets you thinking. Personally I took it as the many suicides who have jumped off the bridge ("currents of loves casualties") from either lack of love or love lost. I liked it.

( Posted by: Jack [Member] On: December 15, 2003 )





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