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There is a thread of picking in the field,
a sage trace is left in the air from
the brushing of skirt and trouser,
the cloth becomes field for ten
little workers.

Minions have no words for others
as the overseers see nothing
but lined paper with insects,
no jotting of thoughts just
familiar colours.

The pinstripe of nature
tailored to the lords demands,
no coloured birth suit other than the
legal pad yellow earns attention
on the field.

Black, blue and red stalks match
perfectly the green and white,
it was the fashion in those days
with any well run bauble of
glass houses.

The page has now been shaken
with the insects abroad
setting colony within colony,
still white lined paper and
pinstripe suit, but no tailored demands.


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Ask not what you can do to poetry, but what poetry can do to you.


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The following comments are for "Cotton Picking"
by londongrey

pickin cotton
Will you share some insight into the deeper meaning behind this piece? Curious is all. I get a hardcore political message from this, my mind tends to run in that direction. In any case, awesome write!

( Posted by: DieBaronHobskewward [Member] On: December 28, 2004 )

Alex
This is beautiful but like Die Barron I am still a bit in the dark. I know it is my lack of understanding that is the problem. Please do expound.

( Posted by: jade [Member] On: December 30, 2004 )

DieB, Jade, Demeter..
Thank you so much for commenting, I'm confused now reading it. But you are right it is about slavery and the freedom then gained 'colony within colony'.

Demeter that verse, the black blue and red denotes the bruises on the slaves, the green and white stalks are the stalks within the field and the overseers.

I know, it is very vague, but I was trying to show rather than tell through imagery, to hopefully evoke and not simply describe an emotion.

I'm so tired. *sniff*

With love

Alex xxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: January 2, 2005 )





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