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You know I love you
but we must remain, no more
than "dearest of friends"

A/N: My first attempt at Haiku.. I know it's no great shakes but that's what first times are all about... all you perverts be quiet

Smile if you're stupid,
laugh if you understand.

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The following comments are for "Bitter Rejection"
by Bartleby

to insomnia74
Really nice, first effort or not.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: May 13, 2002 )

Very nice. First time? Are you sure?

( Posted by: Rose [Member] On: May 13, 2002 )

First times
Not a first time for bitter rejection, but definately my first Haiku..

Special thanks to Jess, for getting me started... betcha didn't know that, did ya Jess?

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: May 13, 2002 )

The reason
Well I read quite a few posts of yours about the subject, the rules, the difficulty in using English words as opposed to the more layered meaning in Japanese etc.. It sounded challenging as well as interesting on a personal level, since I am a martial arts instructor in a Japanese art, so I decided to give it a shot.

Thanks for the kick start, no matter how unintentional.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: May 14, 2002 )

Hey im not going to try to sound like i am cluey on this be honest i didnt even know what haiku was..but i love how your words give out such a strong message with few words...well done cherylene

( Posted by: chezza [Member] On: July 3, 2003 )

Thanks for commenting on such an old piece. I had almost forgotten about this one. Looking back on it now I feel like it's pretty weak, but I have had plenty more practice with this form of poetry. Thanks for the kind words. Perhaps you should try your hand at a haiku soon.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: July 4, 2003 )

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