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My latest writing..I like it


Nonchalant chatter.
Beautifully poised.

Your words never refrain.

Only organs.
C flat, F sharp, it's all the same.

Subtle keystrokes playing upon words.

Smiles filled with emotion.
Emotions lay unsaid.

Anger.
Disdain.
Lust.
Joy?

A psuedo Validity to our false representation.
Of a genuine feeling.

A sensation carresing my mask.
Followed by an expected strike.

The calefaction placed upon my true colors.
Soon to stay.

As every other.


------
Rawr..


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The following comments are for "Seemingly Elegant"
by Vinceypoo

seeds
These are great flash thoughts. You have several options with these, and without decreasing the creative spirit, I see that you can mold these flashes into a poem, several haikus, or even a flash verses. To detail:

"Nonchalant chatter. Beautifully poised.
Your words never refrain.
Only organs.
C flat, F sharp, it's all the same.
Subtle keystrokes playing upon words.
Smiles filled with emotion.
Emotions lay unsaid."

The above objects are great as backbones for haiku. Or they maybe conjoined into a short poem.

"Anger.Disdain.Lust.Joy?" could be a haiku.

You could have great lots of fun doing this.

Regards,
Teflofun.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: January 2, 2005 )

Thanks
Thanks for the comment :) It occured to me. I've just never been much of a Haiku fan..I think it's my being spoiled by writing long stories and need more description! >:)

( Posted by: vinceypoo [Member] On: January 2, 2005 )





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