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He was only seven years old, but he had the heart of a man with a lot of money. This is why his friends call him “Golden Heart.”

He volunteered to go first, and was welcomed by a light applause from the audience on his walk to the front of the class. He used a three second stamp to grasp the attention of his peers. “Today for show and tell, I brought in a picture of my dog.” He held up a photograph of a golden retriever/cocker spaniel mix. The dog was a sandy light blonde color, and it was panting in the picture. “His name is Barf,” said Golden Heart. He paused only to receive a room full of blank stares back at him. His teacher was grinning but was fully occupied by his laptop; he couldn’t tell if his teacher was grinning because of the allusion. Then he stared back over the crowd for what must have been half a minute. At that moment, the reality of his situation kicked him right in the groin; this was going to be his audience for the rest of his years. This roomful of uncultured, lowbrow idiots who were obviously below his comical references, they would ruin him if he ever tried to make it big. The walk back to his seat was long, and he sat down in disgust and self-consciousness. He packed the picture of Barf into his backpack.

Later during recess, he and his friend were sitting on the swings. “What’s the matter, Golden Heart?” asked his friend.

“I guess this business just isn’t cut out for a guy like me,” he replied, staring into the distance. At that very moment, right in his line of sight, a dove came blazing out of the sky, crashing into the middle of the playground, dead. This was symbolic to Golden Heart. He never did another stand-up gig for the rest of his life.

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Vic


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The following comments are for "Champagne in Muskegon"
by VicR28

Done it!
Close - I have drunk champaign in Ludington!


"a three second stamp" i forgot or don't know what this is.

Overall it is a very refreshing and intriguing flash fiction, painting a lot without saying much. Great touch.

Telefin




( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: December 18, 2004 )

Thanks
for your comments. =)

The "three second stamp" is just a pause before the speech when the speaker simply makes eye contact with the audience.

( Posted by: VicR28 [Member] On: December 20, 2004 )





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