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Closed eyes against the windswept sand.
Around me the ocean roars, voice to my rage,
Thunder sky above me driving down,
Plunging deep within, nauseous to the marrow.
Blades of rain mingling with the blood,
Desolation running down my forearm
Fascination within oblivion, nothing to feel,
Just watching the waste of my life draining away.
The sky grows darker, the blood flows stronger
Dark red upon muted golden sand.
I lay curled up in my wonder, reality long since slipped away
Peeling back the skin, watching death approach
Silent surreal courtship, I inevitably accept.

(A/N - not me... empathy can be painful sometimes, and offloading is necessary, so not about me this piece... but a moment in someone else's contemplation of life...)

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The following comments are for "Dying By the Ocean"
by De`esse

from "The sky grows darker, the blood flows stronger" to the end was my favourite. kinda reminds me of some of the things i talk about. i dig it. (especially love the last line)

( Posted by: verve [Member] On: May 11, 2002 )

nice poem
It's a good poem with a good overall theme. good description. I like how you portray death as not a totally negative. I like the last lines about "silent surreal courtship, I inevitably accept". It's a good metaphor.

( Posted by: Seanspacey [Member] On: May 13, 2002 )

Can we say TALENT?
I always like to read the poems on sites like this. Death is a fear of mine, and the last line (which seems to be pretty popular) is wonderful. Keep it up.

( Posted by: Slipknot Guy [Member] On: March 15, 2003 )

this is great,,,,I love it

( Posted by: coco [Member] On: January 4, 2004 )

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