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Separate rooms, in separate houses,
that's how I see us.
We're not mindless enough
to see each other's weakness.
I would notice your quirks
and you would see mine,
and it would strangle the friendship
I think we both fought too hard to achieve.

I think I never see us married, too.
I see us coming together
from two very lonely places,
to hold and be held,
and really, just to spite fate
because we've both been kicked so hard,
and separated by pain from the things
we should be able to love
without trying,
or running away,
or hiding,
or grieving anything lost.

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The following comments are for "Separate Rooms"
by TamiJane

bring it...
hey, i really like this piece of work! it's an interesting subject, and i especially like the first stanza. i'm a big fan of poetry that doesn't sound too contrived, and i think you've definitely achieved that here.

( Posted by: athousandthings [Member] On: July 3, 2005 )

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