The Executioner
by TamiJane (Member) - published: December 19, 2004
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Category - Poetry
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You long ago beheaded all the women
you'll ever meet...
Choosing to keep the worst,
and rapidly discarding the best.
All of us are casualties of your lifelong battle
with the ghosts life has heaped upon you.

I would be kinder to slay the ghosts,
so you could safely open your heart to love.
But I suppose you have determined
ghosts can't swim in tequila...
That there are no nightmares at the bottom of a bottle of beer...
But you see there are.

There you'll find that man you call a loser,
and he will not love or be loved.
He will eventually trade all his cherished dreams
for empty bottles.
He will die unhappy, alone and unfulfilled.
He will carry all his sorrow to the end,
then wish he could trade it all
for one more day with me.

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by TamiJane

OOPS!
Where it says "I would be kinder to slay the ghosts...", it should say "It would be kinder to slay the ghosts"

TamiJane

( Posted by: TamiJane [Member] On: December 21, 2004 )

Demeter
Thank you. I have always believed if I could open a wound, and make someone else see what lies at the bottom of it, I have succeeded. It may not rhyme, it may not follow any other recipe, but it reaches out and touches another heart...and life is good. This craft is not so far beyond my abilities. And just a side note...this applies to drug addicts too (might have known a few of those too).

( Posted by: TamiJane [Member] On: December 21, 2004 )

If I do, will I know when I'm there?
A ripping good write!

I understand and appreciate the use of the bottle. Your use of the bottle, I mean. The way you use it in the poem to evoke a deeply seated evil that gnaws at the soul. Bravo!

I've always been a fan of free verse, and I'm glad that I don't hold much fealty towards structured poetry - because then I probably wouldn't enjoy this so much. Keep up the good work, Tami! :)

( Posted by: Rogan [Member] On: December 22, 2004 )

Thank you Rogan
Yes, the bottle is alive and it does gnaw at one's soul. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. :)

( Posted by: TamiJane [Member] On: December 22, 2004 )

wow Tami...
I am SO agreement with Rogan's words, "A ripping good write".
I have been reading all your poems from first posted. Slowly but surely I will get through them...nice writing and don't let those low rated ones get to you at all, no comments I see were left, or maybe were and were deleted.
I would rate this an 9, very well done. But for some reason I can't log on...
Tami, NEVER stop writing, you have so much to share and are doing a great job of it..
Darlene ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: January 11, 2005 )

Thanks Darlene
I'm so glad you like this poem, and I am grateful for your kind words (don't worry, I couldn't stop writing if I wanted to, the words chase me):)

( Posted by: TamiJane [Member] On: January 12, 2005 )

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