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Fire
My lust, My power
All within me
Within my fire
It's lust
It's sinning
It's a priests deepest desire

Fire

Is the way people look at me
Loving me...
And fearing me all at the same time!

Fire

Searing through me..
Coarsing through my veins
Enshrouding my eyes
Allowing me to decipher, friend from foe
Truth from lies
Reality from distant past
Giving me permission, to see apart from every other

My fire
Is a part of me
As it should be..


------
Rawr..


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The following comments are for "My Fire"
by Vinceypoo

priestS
The start is a bit too standard though with a well-placed image of a priest.

It's good that you qualified and painted the fire in the second half of the work.

Telefun

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: December 18, 2004 )





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