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A/N: Its a tanka not a haiku.

If only they see
Cruel constant threat and danger
Reaching everywhere
Into ending sharp corners
Tearing with a nonchalance

The conscious shape reality.

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The following comments are for "I Wish They Could Understand"
by Furius

poignent (sp?)
I liked this... i see this as a description and explaination, and condemnation of society, and all it represents. I may be wrong... but its a nice slice of perceptive reality.

Ju =*_*=

( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: May 10, 2002 )

I admit to being fairly naive to the stylistism of Haiku's and Tanka's (which I've never heard of before now). I liked the wording and the flow and the image produced for me. Very cool.

( Posted by: adam fever [Member] On: July 2, 2002 )

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