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Someone, someone
kill me please
save me from
this horrid disease

the pain is unbarable
its all kept inside
its like an ocean
it comes tide after tide

i wish everday
that the pain will disapper
but it comes again
rite after i shed tears

my soul has turned dark
as hard as a stone
the devil has won
my soul i had loaned

i lay here in hell
i take my seat
i look at the devil
and bow at his feet

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The following comments are for "Bow Down"
by 7MidniteTears


For such a curt structure, such a rich painting of Job-like suffering! Seems like his detractors have persuaded you to make this choice. Very interesting.


( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: December 15, 2004 )

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