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Biting my lip
Trying not to worry
Hoping you're ok
Will you tell what is wrong?

I want to make you happy all the time
Knowing you're happy is all I need
Your heart is all I want
I promis you everything and I will keep them

You tell me things I know are real
I just don't know how to answer
If I ever ran out of things to say
I would just whisper "I love you"
And hope you understood

Bite my lip
Tell me not to worry
Let me know you're ok
And nothing is really wrong
Then say to me "I love you"
I'll understand


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I wasn't sure if this was such a good one but oh well, I can try.


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The following comments are for "Understand"
by disOrder

disorder: Understand
I really like this and the way you came around to it all in the last stanza. That was awfully neat. It works wonderfully well. It is a good one, I think! :)

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: December 13, 2004 )

Yay!
Thanks. ^_^ and I spelled "promise" wrong. lol Oh well.

( Posted by: disOrder [Member] On: December 13, 2004 )





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