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This is what it does,
This is how it eats you alive.
You are late or don't show,
You don't call.

You do not feel its fingers
Reach in your pockets and pull out the dreams.
You don't notice
As it loads up the love around you
And packs it in a satchel,
Then steals away.

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The following comments are for "The Thief"
by TamiJane

Very good! A new way to look at how something can steal the dreams and love away. That something can be that sinister it attacks in the most unguarded moments. What is that something?

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: December 15, 2004 )

What is was
A lover (or 2, or 3) who didn't communicate...and the reasons are myriad.

( Posted by: TamiJane [Member] On: December 16, 2004 )

You're right Rogan
This particular thief is very deliberate, and manages to remain virtually invisible, but undoubtedly has style :) There's some justice in that, don't you think?

( Posted by: TamiJane [Member] On: December 18, 2004 )

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