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Square pegs round holes
Finding my place; Iím the triangle
Measure in feet; convert to metric
Living up to your dreams and hiding the remainders
Life slowly getting more screwed
With a Phillips head smile
Pilates and kegels we are all PC
Embedded reporters and pervert priests
War and church the new pornography
Bank accounts with negative balances
for the mediocre stock broker
Starve compassion while we eat ourselves to death
Heart attacks- AIDS for white people
Poverty is our slavery
A million man march to the unemployment lines
Lotto tickets for single moms
Sex is dirty with the S.T.D.s of baby boomer generations
Abstinence only programs lying
Wake up wash your hands and donít forget
The Johnson & Johnson lotion
Only $2 at Wal-mart


Every gun that is made, every warship launched, every rocket fired, signifies in the final sense a theft from those who hunger and are not fed, those who are cold and are not clothed.
-Dwight D. Eisenhower

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The following comments are for "I am the triangle"
by Parker

I am the Egghead
There's a stream of consciousness element to this poem which leads me to believe you might have something stronger if you worked on the connections between the things you mention. You have a knack for the sounds words make against each other -- I like "mediocre stock broker" purely for the way it rolls off the tongue. There's also a great rythm underlying the poem, which gives it movement. Unfortunately, I don't think these things make for good poetry on their own.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: December 5, 2004 )

...I disagree with the previous comments - I like the fact that the reader isn't forced into making connections. I like being left to make the abstract concrete. Fantastic.


( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: December 6, 2004 )

Thanks for the comments. What I was trying to say with this piece was; what if these seemingly nonlinear concepts where part of a same truth? I didnít really want to make too strong of a connection between them because I thought it would stifle other peopleís thoughts. I think strangedaze got it right. However, Daedalus and Hazelfaern I donít think you two got it wrong so to speak. Thanks for the comments.

( Posted by: Parker [Member] On: December 7, 2004 )

I really couldn't..
AGREE more with this stream of fluidity and of mind.

( Posted by: ryangilr0y [Member] On: March 26, 2005 )

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