Lit.Org - a community for readers and writers Advanced Search

Average Rating

(0 votes)

You must login to vote

Two harbours inverted on glass,
one offering salt
one offering water.

Trade passes both ways.

Ask not what you can do to poetry, but what poetry can do to you.

Related Items


The following comments are for "What Love Is"
by londongrey

I like what you've got, though it's short and I'm not sure I'm catching everything you're intending to convey.

Why trading salt and water? I get the sense you're implying a delta where fresh water meets the ocean? Or perhaps a salt shaker and a water glass on a diner table? Salient thoughts -- I wish you'd expand on them.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: December 5, 2004 )

Hazel and Lucie
Thank you for commenting.

Hazel I meant the harbour and its own reflection, it is up to you which one provides salt and which provides water.

Hope that makes sense.

Alex xx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: December 14, 2004 )

.:almost a haiku:.
very ingenious imagination. I think of inverse mirrors and virtual math. I think you are nearing the haiku wiring stage.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: December 16, 2004 )

Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Commenting Guidelines:
  • All comments must be about the writing. Non-related comments will be deleted.
  • Flaming, derogatory or messages attacking other members well be deleted.
  • Adult/Sexual comments or messages will be deleted.
  • All subjects MUST be PG. No cursing in subjects.
  • All comments must follow the sites posting guidelines.
The purpose of commenting on Lit.Org is to help writers improve their writing. Please post constructive feedback to help the author improve their work.