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He was greatly amused
By the echos
Emitted by the domed ceiling
Of the dining hall
Which greatly amused her
As she sat across from him
Not being able to help
Falling in love with him

p.s. i'm not a fan of this title, what do you think?

"I like to think that the whole world is my friend"

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The following comments are for "echos"
by supergranny

One thing maybe…..
I like this poem; meaningful and simplistic. I would have ended it with “falling in love” because “him” is only separated by one stanza. It is too repetitive for my liking but other than that I think it’s a nice little slice of life. As for the title: I don’t put much stock in titles so it doesn’t bother me. Good stuff SuperGranny

( Posted by: Parker [Member] On: December 8, 2004 )

Somehow I can just picture this perfectly in my head. Nice little piece. Another great write!


( Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: December 8, 2004 )

thanks to all
thanks guys for the encouragement!
Parker: i like the idea to remove "with him" from the end, on my home computer it has been done, thanks.

( Posted by: supergranny [Member] On: December 8, 2004 )

i ilke it
i like the idea. simple. direct. happy ending to boot.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: December 8, 2004 )

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