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I can barely lift it up in the morning,
to crawl away anymore.
It has become too heavy...
It suffocates me.

The crazy savage who eats holes in my heart
Where the life drips out.
It is two ex-marriages,
Four years of unpaid child support,
My own debts,
and debts someone else incurred,
then dumped in my lap before they ran away and hid.

It is my struggle every moment,
To start over, to be someone else,
To run away myself,
To be free too.

The example my mother gave me
Is silence while suffering
Whatever comes the way of a martyr.

This is not my way,
but it's all I know,
and it does not work...

Does not lift the burden of responsibility,
Does not make it lighter.
Does not ask for, or receive any help.
It only makes the savage hungrier.


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The following comments are for "Martyr"
by TamiJane

All too true
Thank you for your input, it is most appreciated. And yes, different kinds of martyrs have been exalted.

( Posted by: TamiJane [Member] On: December 6, 2004 )

Martyrs TamiJane
The negative image of the martyr is the one I get from your piece here. Not my favourite type. The other, a person who chooses hardship (or death) for a higher principle has my esteem. The first tho' just takes the rot rather than accept responsibility. I think you showed this well. I would look to tightening this up some more. The beginning was more prosy. Maybe it was meant to be this way - if so, just ignore me completely. ~smile~ Enjoyed this by the way. It made me think and I like that. warm regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: December 11, 2004 )





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