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"I Am So Sick of Him"

You look into his eyes
And he looks so angry
If his eyes were a room
There would be frost on the walls
You really hate him when he acts like this
Itís so stupid man
Just knock it off
You continue to look into his eyes
His hand runs through his unkempt hair
Seemingly frustrated
He might be trying to rip it out
And for a moment
Maybe the anger starts to melt
Maybe something more like
Sadness or disappointment is there
NoÖ he is still angry
What for? Itís a waste
All attempts at calming him fail
So you just want to punch him
The desire to strike grows and grows
Until finally you form a fist
Finally you take a swing
You hear a loud shatter
And a stinging pain
You see blood running
Like its about to miss the train
And you find yourself staring again
Staring at a broken mirror

jimmy g--do you see my heart? it is lying on the floor.

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The following comments are for "I Am So Sick of Him"
by JimmyAndHisRocket

I Am So Sick Of Him
A ... disturbing.. piece. I liked it :) *Dials the men in white coats*

( Posted by: A. Cain [Member] On: December 3, 2004 )

well...i'm glad you liked it...i think. maybe the men in the white coats are a good idea. haha. well thanks for reading and commenting. i appreciate it.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: December 3, 2004 )

nice to see you back, noticed you hadn't been around for a bit.

nice poem, particularly the ending.


( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: December 3, 2004 )

love this piece
this is freakin awesome! I didn't see the ending coming at all, i was like... WHOA! he was looking in the mirror! this is a brilliantly written piece!

( Posted by: supergranny [Member] On: December 6, 2004 )

re: jonny T and supergranny
thanks for the comments guys. i'm glad that you both liked it.

JonnyT- it is good to be back. i had a short case of writers block that i'm not quite over but working on it.

supergranny- you're embarrassing me with your praises...i don't even think that i spelled that right. anyway...i'm glad to have thrown you for a loop with the ending.


( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: December 6, 2004 )

Fabulous Jimmy, absolutely superb. Definitely my favorite write by you so far. You should write poetry more often!

Fave lines:
If his eyes were a room
There would be frost on the walls

Excellent imagery! Great write!

( Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: December 6, 2004 )

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