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I would rather hear the truth
slicing through some favored fantasy
which I had created,
than hear an unaware silence shattered by
a lie.

Trust is rent completely
by the very first lie,
whether those words are obviously spoken,
or tearfully discovered in a newly sad remembrance.

And though you never spoke a lie perhaps,
you lived one, and it feels the same
upon discovery. Betrayal
always cuts most deeply in the heart.

It sends the mind scurrying for
a place to hide. It leaves the
blood that was spilled on your hands,
when I'd rather find it on my own.

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The following comments are for "Liar, Liar"
by TamiJane

Inspiration TamiJane
First welcome, second - I have been looking for some inspiration to start writing again. You just may be it! I like this very much. Every word counts. It feels powerful. It is simple but has weight with out sounding to 'poetical'. My expression. Can't find a word to say what I mean here. Shame on me - a writer. Anyway, so far you are good TamiJane. regards and welcome to Litorg. Can't wait to see what else you have. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: December 3, 2004 )

Mutual admiration
I thank you for your comments. I was afraid my form of expression might go unappreciated. If my words inspire you to write more of your beautiful poetry I am happy. In my opinion, you are gifted.

( Posted by: TamiJane [Member] On: December 4, 2004 )

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