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Sleeping in the hall
sticky backs on the lino
I can hear dad snore



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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


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The following comments are for "summer"
by Huni

Summer for huni
don't forget the big fan blowing down the hall and making airplane sounds in it. great haiku.

charlie

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: December 5, 2004 )

Summer
Another good one. Such fresh and surprising images. Your eye is sharp and true.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: December 6, 2004 )

Daedalus, Charlie and gomar
Thanks guys for the beaut comments. Daedalus your comment reminded me of the times we slept on the lawn and the prickles on our backs and the velvet black sky and the million stars .....
We lived out in the back-blocks -so no lights anywhere.
Charlie, I think we share some similar childhood feelings - thanks as always for reading.
Gomar, you make me blush but couldn't say anything that means more to me than that - thanks to you as well. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: December 6, 2004 )

Heat wave
We also gathered in the coolest room as kids. I've also had the oportunity with my own kids as well, but we dragged the mattresses in.

This haiku made me smile. Its rich with emotion and childhood memory. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: December 14, 2004 )

Smilling ..
that you are smiling. Love to do that to people. How great is it to pass these simple things on to another generation of children to remember. huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: December 15, 2004 )





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