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Rowing back to camp
the slap of a rising fish
morning mist lifting

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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


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The following comments are for "Fish"
by Huni

Huni
A fish in my collection? Great that this is great and that you're back! Please check out the acrostic I wrote about you: Claire's Acrostic poetry thread... hugs my little gypsy...

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: December 1, 2004 )

fish haiku
huni - enjoyed reading this poem; i like the juxtapostion of the jumping fish & the fog lifting.

you've captured an interesting moment here and i particularly like the implied emotions captured in this deep haiku.



( Posted by: myron [Member] On: December 1, 2004 )

Wow
I can almost smell the tangy sea air and the fish...this is beautiful Huni...

( Posted by: shakti [Member] On: December 1, 2004 )

misty fish slap
Lovely, lovely piece. Very precisely written yet casual. Just as it should be.

I love fishing and pursue that pastime as much for the experience and wisdom of nature and beauty as I do to catch a fish. Even more so.

I've experienced this scene. Your haiku rings true.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: December 2, 2004 )

Been there
Yes have been there a few times. Well done and welcome back.

( Posted by: chapter1 [Member] On: December 2, 2004 )

Peter, thanks
for my acrostic, my hugs, the rating and your great comment. it is GOOD to be back isn't it. your gypsy huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: December 4, 2004 )

Myron, shakti, gomar and cpt1
Thanks for 'seeing' so much in this myron. HaiKudo's from you are really something! Keep putting yours on too.

Shakti, sweet poetess, nice to hear from you. thanks for comment. I'm looking forward to catching up on your work. You are still on my fav. list.

Gomar, you are right this is very real to me too. Give a little boat, a rod and some water, (a pencil and notebook as well) and I am one happy little chickadee.

Chapter1, what can I say? A wonderful comment AND a high rating, it's all too much. Really, thank you. I know this isn't lightly given from you. Thank you for the welcome back as well.

regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: December 4, 2004 )

Camp
OOooh, I dug right into this one. First of all, this reminded me of camping on a pond which I did quite a lot as a scout. The air is different very early in the morning before the breeze starts. The water is glass smooth. Every oar stroke can be heard and even whispers from the shore.

The images you've spun are so delightful but what got me is the mystery of the early morning boat trip. Its so early and yet, you're headed BACK to camp! Where have you been? Terrific. Filled me with impish glee. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: December 15, 2004 )

Impish
Definitely an impishness to getting up before the rest of camp and taking off in the boat to explore the waking river on my own. You are right about the sounds at that time of day. Getting back just as a few have stirred the camp fire up and started coffee and bacon. Mmm, the best. Thanks again Philo for your taking time with this. By the way, I wonder - do you like Haiku? regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: December 15, 2004 )

Haiku
Haiku amazes me when its done well. I tend to be more long-winded and therefore my poems are as well. I wrote a haiku for Teflon, which he suggested I post but I haven't yet. I also got in on a tanka with Siah but I'm not sure of the results.

Its difficult for me to boil my thoughts down to their essence as you've done here and still convey a message with depth. So I guess I enjoy reading them more than writing them. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: December 15, 2004 )





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