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I dream of passings knights walsing upon a sunset of profuse hues,along the berlin wall.
I dream of sandy sandy shores ,praying for the tides to carry me away.
*drifting into the abyss of nothingness*
I dream of for off planets more tranquil then my own.
I dream of everlasting life and the mystical unknown.
I dream of equal beauty where no ones face stands out alone.
Pastures of orchids and greek godesses on there thrown.
I dream I walk a thousand miles to drink from the fountain of youth .
I'm abrupyly awoken ,I shed a tear or two.
Because none of this would mean a thing if i didn't have you.




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The following comments are for "In my dreams"
by anya_awaits

Interesting.
Anya awaits, Hmmm....well I liked it for the most part, this poem had it's own little mood going for it. Which was very interesting. But I must confess the last line didn't make sense to me. I did not get how it was suppose to fit in with the rest of the poem... Later, Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: May 6, 2002 )

re:Drastine
Thank you for your comment,nut you are missing the point of the last line.Dreams are completely meaningless unless you have someone to share them with.No matter where your dreams take you ,or what goals you have achived in life the only true happiness can be found in love.

( Posted by: anya_awaits [Member] On: May 7, 2002 )

too big a hurry
You should proofread a piece before you publish it; I counted 9 spelling/grammatical errors in a mere 10 lines. That's almost like an insult to your readers, though I know you intended none.

The first 8 lines seemed only a sequence of random, romantic images, and if the last line is true, what do you have to cry about? The last two lines seem to contradict each other, and their tone seems to contradict the rest of the poem.

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: November 2, 2003 )





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