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All inhabitants happy and serene
Inside their six inch tall
Can of beans

Sons and daughters
Husbands and wives
Within this metal container
They live out their lives

Nothing matters beyond
The persistant tin walls
Their society is big and important
Ordained by God, after all

Until some demonic outworlder
Dumps the world out into another dimension
And cooks the beans, each and all
Gone now is the bean world, end of discussion

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Stay metal!
-xit


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The following comments are for "A Massacre Of Beans"
by xitwound117

beans! beans!
hmmm....i am slightly suspicious. i would love to think that you wrote this soley about beans with intentions of amusing yourself but i can't help but wonder if you intended us to see a parellel. i don't know...i do know that i was amused though so i liked it. green beans or baked?

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: December 3, 2004 )

baked
No, I started writing this just to be a little silly, and it grew by itself into some symbolic nonsense that I was frustrated about. Usually I'm good at keeping crap like that out of my stuff, but somehow this thing decided to inject itself with tons of symbolism.

( Posted by: xitwound117 [Member] On: December 3, 2004 )

Beans
I find your work more intriguing with each write. You make me laugh and think. Good combination.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: December 3, 2004 )

chuckling - xitwound
Loved the chuckle this gave me, yes I got a sense of the dark symbolism, but the funny won out just the same. Well written by the way. (imho) regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: December 3, 2004 )

Brilliant Bean Symbolism
Your poem, xitwound, conjured up, for me, the Humphrey Bogart line that the problems of a few small people "don't amount to a hill of beans in this world" and I wonder if it didn't work it's way through your subconscious as part of the inspiration for this tangent of baked bean existentialism.

I like the final line -- the bean massacre puts a brutal end to baked and basted philosophical considerations. Perfect!

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: December 5, 2004 )

X...
...a few things. One - I typically despise rhyming poetry, avoid it like the plague, unless it's really interesting and/or unique. Yours was. It's nice reading something original, especially in the poetry section. I loved you last lump - the whole stanza. As someone, haze I think, mentioned above me, it puts a sort of philosophical spin on it, which I think was your intent.

One section stuck out for me, the third stanza. I think this could have been improved upon. Specifically these two lines:

'Their society is big and important / Ordained by God, after all'

I'm not going to front, as they say; I'm not a fan at all of über-general descriptors that add little, like 'big' and 'important'. I like what 'Ordained by...' is trying to say, but the rhyme seemed a bit forced. Not that these two lines are horrid (they still fit well in the overall scheme of things), I just think that they could be proved upon.

But like I said, this was swell. The title caught my eye (I'm always a fan of darker humor), but you might want to put a bit of a sem-serious (perhaps ironic) twist on it. Wish I could offer any suggestions, but mornings aren't my thing ;)

Great read, original, trippy.

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: December 8, 2004 )





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