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Small gifts are valued and loved,
Treasured assets of mothers' sanctuary.
In thought and heart, they link to you.
Vulnerable units, they need protection.
Nurture and cherish for ever more.
Love so strong will never falter.
Veiled presence with abundant purpose,
Enshrine their person's with utmost care.
To lead down paths, ways so troubled,
In life's random and unfeeling game.
Held tight inside the warm embrace,
Locked together with souls combined.
Emotions true, not denied nor doubted,
Bonds of worship enfold so strong,
So resilient it will never fade.
Time it comes for souls to part,
Grief flows strong from aching hearts.
Though in life the sanctuary departs,
Regain on passing and reunite,
Death recovers what was once misplaced.


The following comments are for "Sanctuary"
by carieta

great style
I like the style of the way you write, however i find this piece quite muddled in the way it present's its ideas... nothing is made clear and there is no purpose or clear point made by the piece nor the title... but for the same word used, i would have thought there to be a number of different separate beginning's of pieces here. Ju =*_*=

( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: May 6, 2002 )

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