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falling down
or stumbling around
i lived my life just how i did and this
is what i've found



disposable,
exposable,
a cavitiy in your mind
and possibly
it's hard to see
just what you want to find

abusable,
misusable,
more weight for you to tow
bendable,
extendable,
too much for my control

unsustainable,
and drainable,
a black hole in my heart
flicking and
picking at
where it fell apart

animal,
a cannibal
of mental energy
example of,
a sample of
emotion chemistry
victimized
and critisized
for nothing of my fault
tried not to see
hard not to be
everything you thought


come on
throw me away
i am useless anyway
just a canity
come on
throw me away
i am wothless either way
drained of sanity

bleeding makes the pain go away
bleeding makes me feel ok


------
-RanE-
DEATH IS OUR ONLY SALVATION


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The following comments are for "useless worthless"
by viewsocruel

Rane!
Glad to find this poem here! I picked this among your writings at the other site because I loved and enjoyed reading this aloud. The rhyming of some words helped contribute to the feeling you want the readers to feel. This piece almost has a lyrical melody,a thin line between rap and country (you are the music man so tell me if one could really blend the two! but that's my observation). How very true: bleeding makes the pain go away and that should make one feel ok.

This is very good, so far the best among all your poems.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: November 25, 2004 )

PETE!
first and foremost here are some corrections on this piece,
canity=cavity
wothless=worthless
obviously

Thank you very much, Pete.
Actually, it is mean to be a song, although rap or country are far from the sound of my soul.
as for combining the two, I am sure there may exist such a genre, or something that may come really close to it since there are so many styles of music that get no air play or have not been discovered by big corporations.
This piece is also the oldest of my poems.
Go fig.

( Posted by: viewsocruel [Member] On: November 25, 2004 )

Electro dark?
Maybe some eatern mix?

( Posted by: DrBlack [Member] On: November 27, 2004 )





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