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You sit there weary eyed,
watching me from a distance.
I see you calculating your next move,
all in attempts to persuade me.

Do I dare say that I am already persuaded?

A puzzled look settles over those beautiful brown eyes.
All the time questioning, dreaming, concocting.
You are revising the plan,
wasting time pondering the ramifications.

When will you be ready to make your next move?

The mere idea of us makes you blush and cringe.
But there is no hiding the desire, the need, the want.
Stop questioning your motives.
Sit back and prepare for the journey.

I am ready. I am willing. This attraction is mutual.



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I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Persuaded"
by nae411

the Snow White and the Seafood Lover
Very intriguing scenario. You simultaneously describe the couple as well as the inner world of the woman.

No doubt they have gone through the stage of sitting in the darkened restaurant eating seafood and discussing Cuban affairs, they have spotted a Santa sweating in the Caribbean evening, and they have just discussed getting away to that cottage on the shores of Lake Huron's Georgian Bay.

Very vivid plans!

Teflofun

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: November 25, 2004 )

Twist nae's arm
As always, your work puts a smile on my face and a "tingle"........... Thanks for sharing nae. Very subtly sensual.

( Posted by: snapshot [Member] On: November 25, 2004 )

Nae
As usual you enchanted me again with your writing. And aren't the comments laughable?! I love, love this!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: November 26, 2004 )

Nae.....
You are truly gifted with the art of persuasion and description. Sigh!....Well done, and if i let my imagination follow then I shall surely be taking a cold shower.

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: November 26, 2004 )

So sensual
I breath of fresh air to read Nae. I love your avatar too.

Thanks,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: November 26, 2004 )

Persuaded
Scintilating, charming, sensual read. I love the last line! Nicely done, Nae.

Don

( Posted by: EaglesSoar [Member] On: November 27, 2004 )

sensual
Very appealing

( Posted by: DrBlack [Member] On: November 27, 2004 )

I can't believe I never..
I don't know how this went by without me thanking you all for your comments. So sorry.

Thank you, thank you, thank you.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 18, 2005 )





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