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I.
She is the artist
I am hers, her creation
Her second canvas

II.
She molds me slowly
Painting my soul with her mind
I start to take shape

III.
Not quite like the first
Her blood plucks at my heartstrings
I am nearly there

IV.
Every part like hers
Her hair ties sinow to bone
Just one more step

V.
I am made whole now
Her words breathe life into my lungs
A nine month process

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Purr like a kitten; Scratch like a bitch


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The following comments are for "Mother"
by snuffystuff

Mother
I like this :)

(About your signature.. did "S" land on Guernsey?)

( Posted by: A. Cain [Member] On: November 24, 2004 )

SnuffyStuff
This is great...very strong words, I liked it also...You painted a vivid picture here...

Thanks for this...

Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: November 24, 2004 )

just making sure
I was unsure about this poem so its nice to get some approval. I have never had much experiance with haikus....but me being japanese (in part)..I should...heh just wanted to ask for more comments and some help seeing any flaws... so hard to do on my own....Guernsey?..I don't believe so...its a quote from Lex Luthor(s) and Lionel Luthor(d)....

( Posted by: snuffystuff [Member] On: November 24, 2004 )

mom

I like this. I'm surprised- no "it's not Haiku" comments.(Long story,short comment)

Who rates a 2 w/o comment?

No Byron
Smells like teen Uron
It's Myron

Your kind comment on my first post rekindled the flame of my nearly extinguished dreams.
Thank you

s

p.s.

nice new bio

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: January 8, 2005 )

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