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I empty my room, so
I can breathe deeper

Sua sponte,

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The following comments are for "Acoustic palette recovered"
by City

taking my time
thank you Jessica,
after some of the comments I am not sure this can be called 'haiku' ... but there is no other type I can find for this short threeline writing
I appreciate your comments, and will concentrate more on longer poems
will show them here if they turn out good enough for this audience!

( Posted by: City [Member] On: November 29, 2004 )

Perhaps it shouldn't be called Haiku. That is ok though. Call it Brevity to the max. I like this alot. It takes a brilliant mind to have the readers, read the UNSAID.
Submit them under Poetry, I have seen lots of short forms as this. Very nicely done City.


( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: April 28, 2005 )

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