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As I fall
Time seems to stall

Is that me over there?
Am I one to care?

As the scenes pass by
Am I really that high?

Whipping through the wind
Relieved of all sin

I see you standing alone
Standing, oh so prone

Thoughts pull me to
The one behind you

I wrestle him to the ground
He makes not a sound

I punch, scrape, and kick
I here the slightest click

Eyes snap open with speed
You stand before me

I'm laying upon a bed
Maybe I'm really dead?

No, I shall not creep
I was only asleep

Dreaming of who I love
Was it a simple dove?

No, behind you was he
I was dreaming of only me.

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Pushing a lover to love another. Are you turned on?


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The following comments are for "Me."
by Tyrant Monkey

Yeyah
Oh, how I love myself. LOL. Thank you for your comment, and I did mean to make it that way. It was meant to mess with your head until you realize the message is not something deep, it's just "I think I'm the cutest little fellow in the world. May as well dream about BEATING MYSELF UP!" Heh. Tyrant

( Posted by: Tyrant Monkey [Member] On: May 3, 2002 )

to Tyrant Monket
I would say you achieved your end very well. That was exactly my thought process as I read it.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: May 3, 2002 )

Lol
Lol, sometimes I have good poems. Just takes some confusing tactics.

( Posted by: Tyrant Monkey [Member] On: May 3, 2002 )





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