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The butterfly is like two bread slices
Dancing in the air lighting on flowers.
The dragonfly is like a languid spear,
Winged so twon’t pierce anyone who loiters.

The butterfly’s flight is like a floating
Sailboat: frenzied flutters spill pixie dusts.
The dragonfly’s volation, a mission
Of man to lift his cross to wand’ring gusts.

The butterfly can melt down on a plate
If you don’t spread it quick on your pancake.
The dragonfly can breathe fire on your face
If you don’t eat what your Chinese friend bakes.

The butterfly is a pretty ribbon
Upon Mother Earth’s sacrosanct forehead.
The dragonfly is a green-golden brooch
Pinned to the horizon’s majestic shred.

Author's Note:
Inspired by Eve Merriam's (1916-....) poem 'Simile: Willow and Ginkgo'. Merriam is a published and awarded writer who was born in Philadelphia.



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crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond




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The following comments are for "Butterfly and Dragonfly"
by peterpaulino

Demeter & Lucie
Demeter, thank you. Somehow I think the reason why it's jagged is that because I have forgotten to rearrange the stanzas: 2nd should be the third and the third 2nd. I'll do the revision if I'm sure there'll be no more comments on this piece. I appreciate you notice!

Lucie, haha! I thought of experimenting on the third stanza. You'll notice that if you'll just take away the 'flys' from butterfly and dragonfly the third stanza will make sense, I am happy that it's how you responded, you'll think I am naughty that I intended to give the readers a bit of a puzzle. Thank you for reading!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: November 23, 2004 )

pete
noice structure

( Posted by: viewsocruel [Member] On: November 23, 2004 )





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