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Peeping through the doors of my memory...
Thoughts of those good old days linger on my mind
Thoughts of your badinage bring a smile on my face.

Holding my hand, crossing the busy road…
Carrying my bag till the school.
Saving half of your chocolate for me…
Sharing your deepest secrets.
Taking the blame when was the culprit!
Beating teenage blues together
In good and bad weather
We were birds of the same feather.
Doing my share of house work, helping mom
You loved nursing and nurturing me…
Some bonds, I guess, are made by nature!

Between you and me there was only love then…
But now there are miles as well.
Yet, your love is so palpable
And those memories are a palisade to my sorrow!

This isn’t a paean of praise
This is neither a panegyric
This is an ode to MY ANGEL…
Sis, you are as pure as a water droplet just released from the cloud.
And I am fond of you…ad infinitum!


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The following comments are for "DEAR SISTER…"

SVDEOL sister
This is a lovely poem for sisters. I have a few comments that I think may help smooth out the read. I've capitalized the words I'm suggesting below for clarity.

'Thoughts of your badinage bring a smile TO my face' I think ON would also work but TO in this case seems better.

'Carrying my bag TO school' You could also say 'to the school'

'Taking the blame when I was the culprit!' You missed the "I" in this one, which I didn't think would stand out as capitalized in my suggestion.

I had to look up three words: 'badinage' 'paean' and 'panegyric' which are all beautiful words but seem to contrast with the conversational tone of this poem.

I hope this is helpful. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: November 21, 2004 )

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