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Itís one of those days.
...
Canít even hold the brush.
My blush
seems to be too bright again,
overlaid
with embarrassment, guilt and regret.
Sigh... Silhouette
is merging with shadows - I realize
that you have been here,
with me,
all this time.



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modified 11.19.2004

hope to hear your comments and critique
~ thank you ~

------
Sua sponte,
O.


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The following comments are for "- sudden knowledge -"
by City

thank you!
Jessica, I appreciate the comment
just have to figure out how to edit the text!
I'm glad to be back :)

( Posted by: City [Member] On: November 19, 2004 )

clear!
thank you!
see what I've changed
hope this looks (and sounds) better for the first improvisation :)

( Posted by: City [Member] On: November 19, 2004 )

Stumbling Upon Beauty
I like what you've got, here, City. It strikes me as an evocation of a very subtle moment, yet it's recognizable, almost familiar. Reading this is almost like reading haiku -- brief yet illuminating.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 20, 2004 )

Hazel Faern
Thank you, Jennifer
I'm glad you found something for you in my words... to me it is a meaning of poetry - to wake personal/inner feelings in people

thank you again

( Posted by: City [Member] On: November 22, 2004 )





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