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Slowly, Barefoot
by penumbra (Member) - published: November 18, 2004
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Category - Poetry
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Pursue the small Thought
through
dim-cornered
dreaming
into a tapering corridor
crowded
by gnomes, clad
in rusted
unrelenting Sorrow

A Shadow fell
over
my mouth
agape, spewing
sinful History
rebirthed
swaddled in His W.O.R.D.S.
effervescent, noisome

Clamber
over these, Heart
my cridhe dubh
the sharp pebbles
cut



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The following comments are for "Slowly, Barefoot"
by penumbra

Amazing
Maybe its just my frame of mind where I'm at in life I don't know, but this was is amazing in my opinion. I honestly wouldn't change a thing about it, it hits hard and it hits fast. It sucks the reader in without any warning and it just all over ROCKS! The title was perfect, a wonderful title....ok I've gushed enough....but you get the idea that I like it right? Keep writing more of the same and you'll have a fan in me.


~Jessica

( Posted by: Jessicanm [Member] On: November 19, 2004 )

Slowly, Barefoot
I second

( Posted by: A. Cain [Member] On: November 19, 2004 )

Penumbra Slowly
There is something about this poem that is both comforting and disturbing. I take it straight to heart. I wish I understood more clearly the reason you set aside words with Capital Letters A.C.R.O.N.Y.M. form. If you have time to elaborate I'd appreciate the explanation.

This has an elegant trepidation.

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: November 19, 2004 )





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